Minta Penilaian Gan

[bunyaminfranklin]

Stand by

The moonbeam light up my room
But thats not the light that i want
Thausand stars blinking on the sky
But those arent the stars that i want

I dont need those hundred color
When rainbow is the perfect color in my life
I dont need those hundred love song
When your name is the best melody for my ear

I am the moon who waits for the sun
I am the night who waits for the day

Even the time pass me by
Season still goes by
Just let me stand by
To hear you say goodbye

Sedih ini puisinya

 

[nemanro]

Bagus kurang rima dan diksi
Misal Bukan itu yang kumau
Itu sudah menunjukka caha

klo ditranslate memang rima dan diksinya jadi terasa diterpaksakan !

but anyhow , the massage was there ( thx alot for madame angeline , i loved it )

 

[EL-K]

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[zaki415]

Stand by

The moonbeam light up my room
But thats not the light that i want
Thausand stars blinking on the sky
But those arent the stars that i want

I dont need those hundred color
When rainbow is the perfect color in my life
I dont need those hundred love song
When your name is the best melody for my ear

I am the moon who waits for the sun
I am the night who waits for the day

Even the time pass me by
Season still goes by
Just let me stand by
To hear you say goodbye

Nice Poetry